My Writing Goals

In Te Maunga we have been working on our goal's. I think i could of done a better effort by writing more so that the reader that wants to know what i am learning understands. I think i did well by showing what my goal is and why i am that level. The most i'm focusing on is sentence structure. These are my goal's.

	Surface Features			Deeper Features
	Spelling	Punctuation	Sentence Structure	Vocabulary	Idea	Structure	Organisation
Where am I? copy and paste the definition from above	R4	R4	R2	R4	R4	R4	R4
	I spell most essential list words correctly and attempt some difficult words using spelling rules.	I use capital letters, and sentence endings correctly for most of my sentences and some other punctuation correctly.	I can write a lot of simple everyday words that I already know.	I use a variety of words and phrases to add detail and I choose words to make people want to read my writing.	My ideas are on the topic and are beginning to show some complexity. (Personal Voice)	I have all the structure and one part may be developed. I use appropriate language features.	I put my ideas in order or groups and am attempting paragraphs. I use clear pronouns.
How do I know? Give some examples from your writing of why you think you are in that box	I Know that i am on 4 because i challenge myself on hard words like goosebumps,busting,pedaled and by using the right contraction.	I think I am a 4 because I have been using commas, full stops,.? capital letters .	I am a r2 because I am not using compound words	I am a r4 because  I used similes and metaphors like i am a bursting sun to put more detail in my writing.	I am a r4 because i have lot’s of ideas like i was getting goosebumps,my face was like a bursting sun.	I am r4 because I use paragraphs in my writings.	I am a r4 because i use clear pronouns and i am starting to use complexity.
What next? What are your next learning steps?	By challenging myself  with harder words and by doing my spelling every night.	I will start to put in       ?   !   (   )      ‘	Include detail by using longer sentences so that the readers understand.	I am going to put in more metaphors and picture  for the reader's mind.	I need to make sure my ideas show complexity.	I will put more paragraphs and sentences into my writing.	I need to start sequencing my idear correctly in paragraphs.

Tryathlon

Paihia School had a Tryathlon and Te Maunga wrote a recount about the tryathlon. What i liked about my writing is that i used metaphors to describe my writing. Next time i think i could do better by writing more words and more metaphors.
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Paihia School Tryathlon

First of all last week Paihia school had a tryathlon , in paihia,Miss williams had a talk to us about where we had to go and where you’re  not allowed to go . So we walked down to the beach,I was getting nervous. We were at the beach and I was getting goosebumps.

Next it was our turn,Miss williams said ready set go,there we were in the water splashing the salty water everywhere . Then we started to run,three girls went past me so I sprinted past those three girls .I ran and ran.

After that I squeezed my shoes on and I jumped on the bike as quickly as i could and pedaled as fast as i could. Lilli-Rose went past me,it was my second lap, Lilli-rose went passed the finish line, so did I.

In the end My face was like a sun that was bursting,my mum gave me water. I was so happy and was proud of myself , I feel like collapsing tower.

Beach Ed

In Te Maunga we made a slide about beach ed. The part that I liked that on our slide is the part that says the funnest part. I think we could do better next time by saying more facts but it was fun making the slides. Here is our slide. From Tayla and me Payton

Get New Zealand Writing

I have been learning to right a metaphor about me. I think i did well with writing a metaphor about me, also I think i could do better next time by Using good metaphors. I had a fun time doing metaphors about me.
E.g

Payton is a cookie that is unbreakable  

Payton is a playground that makes kids happy

Here is two photos